J英文作文:改寫與仿作J

 

November 16, 2000

 

英文作文在各類考試中無不舉足輕重,小自中、大學多元入學考試,全民英檢(GEPT),大至托福(TOEFL)考試及國外大學碩、博士班研究報告、論文撰寫。因此,我們必須練習英文作文。

 

天下事無不熟能生巧,再多的理論,再好的方法,如果不去實際練習,也是枉然,學習英文作文更是如此。學習英文作文最好的方法是什麼?除了背誦一些簡潔(concise)、清晰(clear)和流暢(smooth)的短文之外,就是實際練習。背誦短文的目的是為了「讀書破萬卷,下筆如有神」,而不致在考作文的時候有「一張白紙對青天,腹內無才真可憐」的窘境。

 

我們開始學習作文的時候,一定由模仿範文開始。模仿的好處是:範文可以激發我們的靈感,幫助我們養成良好的寫作習慣。模仿又以改寫為開始,也就是改寫範文中與我們身分、年齡、看法、喜惡及生活習慣及生活環境等不一樣的部分。所以初習作文的人都會從改寫及仿作開始,再經由改寫及仿作進入創作階段。

 

背誦短文要和實際練習相結合,也就是將短文視為範文,改寫模文,然後再模仿範文寫一篇屬於自己的短文,以下就是範文及其改寫跟仿作後的短文。

 

 

    文 (1)

My Favorite Way to Spend a Weekend

 

(topic sentence) My favorite way to spend a weekend is to be with people, especially at parties. (discussion) People entertain me, particularly at parties with lots of dancing, talking, or games that make me laugh. People please me, especially at parties that end with everyone singing around a piano, really singing, I mean, not just bellowing something like “ I’ve Been Workin’ on the Railroad.” People at parties are fun, but I also enjoy people in other ways. I like to dine out and share the theater with them, and I like to invite them to my house for dinner and bridge. In fact, I like to do most things that involve meeting new people and enjoying old friends. (conclusion) Being with people makes my weekends.

 

範文改寫

 

(topic sentence) My favorite way to spend a weekend is to be with ︿ people,

                                                                                                        my classmates,

especially at parties. (discussion) People entertain me ︿ particularly at parties with

                                                   They make          happy,

lots of ︿ dancing, talking, or games that make me laugh. People ︿ please me,

         disco                                                                                                            They also

especially at parties that end with everyone singing around a piano, really singing, I

                                                                                                                by

mean, not just bellowing something like Ive Been Workin on the Railroad. People

folk songs with me.

︿ at parties are fun, but I also enjoy people in other ways. I like to ︿ dine out and My classmates                                                  them                                                     eat at MacDonalds

share the theater ︿ with them, and I like to invite them to my house for dinner and

                and go to the movies

bridge. In fact, I like to do most things that involve meeting new people and enjoying

chat

old friends. (conclusion) Being with ︿ people makes my weekends.

                                                                           My classmates

 

 

改寫後短文 

 

My favorite way to spend a weekend is to be with my classmates, especially at parties. They make me happy, particularly at parties with lots of disco dancing, talking, or games that make me laugh. They also please me by singing folk songs with me. My classmates at parties are fun, but I also enjoy them in other ways. I like to eat at MacDonald’s and go to the movies with them, and I like to invite them to my house for dinner and chat. Being with my classmates makes my weekends.

 

 

    文 (2)

 

My Favorite Summer Activity

 

My favorite summer activity is going to the beach and swimming. When it is 90 degrees, most people think only of finding some way to keep cool and to relax at the same time. Going to the beach is certainly one way that you can do both. One can plunge into the water to keep cool, or you can just lounge along the water’s edge to relax. Sometimes people make a complete ritual of going to the beach. You pack a picnic lunch, bring along some drinks and a portable radio. Then one is prepared for a long afternoon of relaxation. If only I did not have to work, I would probably go to the beach every day.

(From p.14, The Paragraph Book)

 

 

改寫後短文

 

In summer it is uncomfortably hot in Taipei. So my favorite summer activity is going to the country and sit under a large tree by a little river. After sitting down, I take off my shoes and put my feet in the water. The water makes me feel cool and comfortable. I do not feel hot anymore. Then I start reading short stories or playing the guitar. I enjoy going to the country very much. If only I did not have to study, I would probably go to the country every day.

 

 

練習改寫一段時間之後,便可開始練習仿作。仿作與改寫不同,仿作是利用範文的內容或從範文中獲得的靈感,寫一篇自己的文章。以下就是一篇範文及其仿作。

 

 

    文 (3)

 

City Living

 

Living in New York is exciting.  Finding many things to do is always easy in this large city.  Visiting different museums is educational.  Attending concerts is enjoyable.  Constantly meeting new people is interesting.  Furthermore, observing different people from all over the world is fascinating.

 

However, living in New York City is sometimes annoying.  Riding the subways and buses is often troublesome.  Getting from one place to another is tiring and time-consuming at certain times of the day.  Being pushed and shoved is typical during rush hours.

 

Being alone in New York is not uncommon.  Yet, being bored is very unusual.

( From p.42, Write Away)本範文原為練習使用動名詞。

 

仿作後短文

 

I live in Taipei.  Living here is exciting.  Finding many things to do is always easy.  There are several museums in Taipei.  Visiting them is educational.  Concerts are given from time to time.  I find attending concerts enjoyable.  There are many foreigners in Taipei.  Meeting new people is interesting and observing different people from all over the world is fascinating.

 

However, living in Taipei is sometimes annoying.  It is troublesome to ride buses.  It is tiring and time-consuming to get from one place to another during rush hours.  Air pollution in Taipei is intolerable.

Being alone in Taipei is not uncommon. Yet, being bored is very unusual.

 

如果你準備參加大學多元入學考試或全民英檢中級測驗之英文作文測試,從現在開始,依照以上的改寫與仿作兩種方法,十週中每週改寫一篇,再以十週每週仿作一篇,連續寫了二十篇英文作文之後,英文作文必有長足的進步,且能漸漸脫離改寫與仿作階段,進入創作階段。當然寫得篇數愈多,進步也愈大。此後,在參加英文作文測試時,當不再有「一張白紙對青天,腹內無才真可憐」的窘境。「天下無難事,只怕有心人」,只看你有沒有恆心。

(改寫自拙著英語英文怎麼學大學聯考英文作文與翻譯指導兩書)

 

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